05.01.2013, 18:21
Darf hier ein Langzeit-Inaktiver mal aufmischen?
Ich hab mir alle Gedichte durchgelesen und finde sie teilweise echt super. Kürzlich hab ich mich selber am schreiben versucht, weswegen ich hier gelandet bin. Hoffe es stört niemanden, dass der Text auf Englisch ist, ich kann damit einfach manchmal besser.
I have yet to meet a mind like mine
Others are asked how they are, they always say "fine"
So will I, but guess what, it's a lie
Superficial sometimes weird, mostly kind
Where to find me? Among the anti-social freaks,
I assemble them around, guess the biggest one is me
Dumb troubles, read my thought bubbles please
I will never tell 'cause for me it's hard to speak
When the words slip away, I want you to see:
I have yet to meet a mind that's free.
Und noch einer:
Back then?
I know that both of us did say
The words that sounded so cliché
"I'll always love you, forever, babe".
The swears and promises we made
Break them.
Save me?
I know that back then I was sure
That I knew that you were the cure
Of all the sadness and obscure
Black darkness, your light was pure.
Forsake me.
Deluded by the feelings' might
Mine were not sane, was it outright
Addiction to you?
And all the tears that I have cried
Cannot be wrong, I know we lied
To ourselves.
Kritik sowie Verbesserungsvorschläge erwünscht
Ich hab mir alle Gedichte durchgelesen und finde sie teilweise echt super. Kürzlich hab ich mich selber am schreiben versucht, weswegen ich hier gelandet bin. Hoffe es stört niemanden, dass der Text auf Englisch ist, ich kann damit einfach manchmal besser.
I have yet to meet a mind like mine
Others are asked how they are, they always say "fine"
So will I, but guess what, it's a lie
Superficial sometimes weird, mostly kind
Where to find me? Among the anti-social freaks,
I assemble them around, guess the biggest one is me
Dumb troubles, read my thought bubbles please
I will never tell 'cause for me it's hard to speak
When the words slip away, I want you to see:
I have yet to meet a mind that's free.
Und noch einer:
Back then?
I know that both of us did say
The words that sounded so cliché
"I'll always love you, forever, babe".
The swears and promises we made
Break them.
Save me?
I know that back then I was sure
That I knew that you were the cure
Of all the sadness and obscure
Black darkness, your light was pure.
Forsake me.
Deluded by the feelings' might
Mine were not sane, was it outright
Addiction to you?
And all the tears that I have cried
Cannot be wrong, I know we lied
To ourselves.
Kritik sowie Verbesserungsvorschläge erwünscht